essay due in the next three hours please correct and make some changes where it is needed. really important.?

Question

Every young adults have their own inspirations, their own passions and their own dreams. Unfortunately, many lose sense of motivating their selves, fulfilling their crafts, and pursuing their goals, just moments after they step out of high school. As a result, many young adult fails, in a sense of compassion for a higher education.
Generally speaking, I don’t want to become one of those young adults. I certainly have a desire for a higher education. I strongly believe that Fresno Pacific University is the right place to accomplish it. A higher education is very important to me because I believe it will somewhat build a bridge to the person that I want to become. It is why I am certain that I want to attend Fresno Pacific University not only for its academic status and ethics, but also for its influential environment.
As I inputted in my recent application for Fresno Pacific University, I am still “undecided” on what course I’m going to major in. However, I am confident that Fresno Pacific University will help me discover my major as I progressed through each semesters.
In addition to its’ academic status that can surely provide me all the help that I need, I am very eager to attend Fresno Pacific University for its good ethics. Moral values are very important to me, and when I found out (from a friend who recently graduated from FPU) that Fresno Pacific University is a Christian university, I was even more motivated to go to college. I was raised in an environment in which everyone must treat everyone with respect. My parent’s were really strict about teaching their children with good proper manners, which brings me to my last point.
Environment, in terms of my surroundings, is extremely important, as it will somewhat influence the characteristics I will portray as I develop and become an adult. When I heard all the good comments about Fresno Pacific University, one thing always stands out--the influential environment it portrays to each students and vice versa. From researching about FPU in the web, through hearing about it in a Christian radio station and through reading about it in their issue of Axis, I found out that many students who are enrolled and have graduated from FPU are having or have had the best time of their lives. Students in FPU are friendly and most importantly, they come with good influence.
In other words, I don’t think there is a better university that suits my needs other than Fresno Pacific University. I am sure that Fresno Pacific University will be a bridge to keep me motivated and satisfied in pursuing my goals in life. I am also confident, that with the help of Fresno Pacific University, I’ll be able to grow in Christ mentally, emotionally, and spiritually, in which I believe it can and will bring out the person I want to be.

Answer 1

1st sentence: Delete the word "Every".

2nd sentence: Change "their selves" to "themselves" and delete the comma after "goals"

3rd sentence: Change "adult fails" to "adults fail" and delete the comma.

1st sentence of third paragraph: Change "inputted" to "sent" or "input"

2nd sentence of third paragraph: Change "progressed" to "progress" and "semesters" to "semester"

1st sentence of fourth paragraph: Don't need apostrophe (') after "its"

4th sentence of fourth paragraph: Change "parent's" to "parents" and delete the comma in that sentence.



Now, the only thing I was checking for is grammatical errors. Anyways, that's all I found with a quick scan of your paper. Anyways, good luck!

Answer 2

Every young adult has their own inspirations, their own passions, and their own dreams. Unfortunately, many lose sense of motivating oneself, fulfilling their crafts, and pursuing their goals, just moments after they step out of high school. As a result, many young adults fail, in a sense of compassion for a higher education.

Generally speaking, I don’t want to become one of those young adults. I certainly have a desire for a higher education. I strongly believe that Fresno Pacific University is the right place to accomplish it. A higher education is very important to me because I believe it will somewhat build a bridge to the person that I want to become. That is why I am certain that I want to attend Fresno Pacific University not only for its academic status and ethics, but also for its influential environment.

As I mentioned in my recent application for Fresno Pacific University, I am still “undecided” on what course I want to major in. However, I am confident that Fresno Pacific University will help me discover my major as I progress through each semester.

In addition to it's academic status, I am very eager to attend Fresno Pacific University for its good ethics. Moral values are very important to me. I recently found out from a friend who recently graduated from FPU that Fresno Pacific University is a Christian university. I was even more motivated to go to college. I was raised in an environment in which everyone must treat one another with respect. My parents were really strict about teaching their children with proper manners, which brings up my last point.

In terms of my surroundings, environment is extremely important, as it will somewhat influence the characteristics I will portray as I develop and become an adult. When I heard all tof the outstanding comments about Fresno Pacific University, one thing always stands out--the influential environment it portrays to each student. From researching about FPU on the web, hearing about it on Christian radio statio, and through reading about it in an issue of Axis, I found out that many students who are enrolled and have graduated from FPU are having or have had the best time of their lives. Students at FPU are friendly and most importantly, they come with good influence.

In other words, I don’t think there is a better university that suits my needs other than Fresno Pacific University. I am sure that Fresno Pacific University will be a bridge to keep me motivated and satisfied in pursuing my goals in life. I am also confident, that with the help of Fresno Pacific University, I’ll be able to grow in Christ mentally, emotionally, and spiritually, in which I believe it can and will bring out the person I want to be.



Whew...hoped that helped!

Answer 3

Every young adult has.... maybe?



'inputted' should be just 'put' and no apostrophe (') after its.



Looks just fine. I'm sure they're not expecting it to be perfect. They should be happy enough with your level of written English and the content.



Good luck!